Today’s blog topic comes from helping my son do his homework last week. One of the assignments was to replace the verbs with stronger ones.
Here is an example from his homework.
Ben got a bag of chips from the shelf.
Stronger word choice:
Ben grabbed a bag of chips from the shelf.
Yes, both sentences are very similar. But the key is that in the second example you learn how Ben got the bag. The word “grab” means to “seize something quickly.” So when I used the word “grabbed,” you know that not only did Ben get a bag of chips, but you understand how he did it.
So when picking stronger words, you are trying to choose words that give the reader more information. Instead of talking loudly, you shout. Instead of hitting hard, you wallop and instead of smile smugly, you smirk.
Take a look at this example:
Seething with anger, Sarah took the book from him. She walked out the door, closing it loudly as she left.
Stronger word choices:
Sarah snatched the book out of his hand. She stomped out the door, slamming it behind her.
The second example gives a clearer picture of what happened. You know by her actions that Sarah is either angry or annoyed.
In the second half of the first example, instead of picking a strong verb, an adverb were used. As a writer, using the occasional adverb is fine but in reality, you should aim to use strong verbs (as in the second example.) The use of a lot of adverbs shows lazy writing.
Quick grammar refresher: An adverb modifies a verb, adjective or other adverbs. They answer the question where, when, how and to what extent. You don’t have to eliminate all adverbs but if an adverb can easily be eliminated without change the meaning of the passage, then it should be removed.
Of course, though sometimes a stronger verb will work better, there are times when a simple word is fine. Characters can walk. They don’t always have to stomp, dash, hurry, shuffle, scurry or whatever.
You want to pick the best word for the scene. This doesn’t mean you need a big, fancy or unusual word. It means picking the right word to say the right thing in just the right way. It doesn’t mean rushing to a thesaurus to sprinkle your book with synonyms when a simpler word will do.
As you revise your draft, examine your word choices. You might ask yourself, “Is this really what I mean?” or “Is there a better word to convey this so my readers will understand what is happening?” Finding words that capture your meaning and convey it to your readers is challenging. But you can tighten up your writing by making sure you are picking strong words.